Fic update: Death Note - Broken Hallelujahs - Chapter 14

[tallulahgs]

[Title] Broken Hallelujahs
[Rating] PG-13 (slightly above that language-wise)
[Fandom] Death Note
[Story Summary] AU. Neither Raito nor Near's victory went as planned. Now the task force and the SPK are on the run with Kira's notebook and all the power of the new world against them.

Kira's first live-TV judgement begins.

[Chapter 14 on Fanfiction.net]

[Chapter 14 on skyehawke.com]

Comments

[fatalna.livejournal.com]

I guess I ran up against some kind of 4300 character limit, so here's the remainder:

In the final scene, the simmering of arguments finds a kind of closure with Mogi. He doesn't retaliate against Ide's attacks, instead taking them in and offering his concern for a colleague who's hurt and forgotten in the aftermath of the botched execution. There is a faint echo of an internal argument as he compares his romantic tryst with Misa to what he has just learned about Ide and Matsuda, but his calm and steady personality wins over it, or at least tables that argument until later.

In conclusion, why isn't it Monday yet?

[tallulahgs]

Thank you as always for the detailed comment! I love that my fic makes you think of so many things to say!

Re: the evil ones line, yes, I do see what you mean. My thinking when I wrote it was that Raito was using Mikami's own rhetoric and wasn't bothering to construct an argument because he thought Mikami was still loyal to him... so he was just all, "you don't need to worry about her. Just put her in that box marked Sinners, and carry on worshipping me." So he wasn't interested in being precise, but if you think it didn't ring true then that's fine - I can definitely see your thinking.

Yes, he wanted everyone to see Takada's death, and also, I think, he liked that she wouldn't get to preside over the execution - that it would be Kira, sweeping through cutting down all the sinners, and she wouldn't be associated with it at all. Of course, he was also not, perhaps, in his most logical mood and so wasn't considering the potential repercussions of this!

[fatalna.livejournal.com]

That makes sense, I didn't consider Raito using Mikami's logic in his speech...

One of these days I'll have to do another collage (I already an idea, just need the time and space).

Or write a review as a series of haikus. Ha!