Fanfiction update lol

[tallulahgs]

Chapter Three of Under My Skin is up! Reviews appreciated. This chapter has some slash, of sorts, but nothing above a PG-to-mild-PG-13 level.

Crossposted to theharukiya.

Comments

[tannakitten.livejournal.com]

Oh, that was good. What's the name of that ship, I wonder? It's like.. Kaimagata.. except not. Nice job with that fade-out after the slash scene, too. Lets your imagination go wherever it wants~

Though, I can't help but feel sorry for Kai. When/if Kaori and Yamagata's minds do get put back in their bodies, if Kai tries to make a move on Yama, he's gonna get punched into the wall and have every single swear known to man (and maybe a potted plant of some sort) thrown at him.

The chapter overall was really cute X3 It almost seemed more fluffy than sex-like because of the abstinence. Awww.

Oh, and there's a missing quotation mark when Kaori is talking to Junoichi after the slash scene. Just thought I'd let you know :D

[tallulahgs]

I don't know that it has a name... ship names don't take bodyswapping into account XD

*now totally needs to write a drabble where Yamagata throws a potted plant at Kai*

Thank you! Glad you liked it.

You have a good eye for detail :D

[(Anonymous)]

Oh you've confused poor Smem.
xD

Kai/Kaori is one of her big nos.
Kai/Yama is one of her favourite pairings.
xDD

Damn you and your clevernosity.
;__;

Nicely written though, I love how you've got the awkwardness of the two of them, in separate bodies.
Some of the small things really make it, the whole 'corners' thing was cute. :3

Anyway, looking forward to your next update.

- Smem.

[tallulahgs]

Mwahahaha. >:)

I mean, um, thank you for commenting ^^ glad you liked it!

[smemmah.livejournal.com]

Hmph.
xD
-pokes-

And yup.
Cheered me up. :3